Trying to create a similar space to /r/photocritique
Looking back, I wish I had taken some steps to the left so that I wouldn't have gotten the shady side of the house and also making the corner of the house straight relative to the framing. Right now I have rotated the framing in order to level the text properly.
Any other advice is welcome!
Here is an alternative crop:
Perspective effects have rather doomed you here.
That said, I'm not sure there's anything that interesting about this view - I can see why you tried a shot (it could have been an interesting view), but the result isn't telling me a story or impressing me with its beauty. In particular, the text looks almost as if its applied by you rather than being written on the building. What do you see in the photo that appeals to you?
As you say, the text is very well painted on there and the facade of the building is very well painted as well, creating a field of almost artificial order. I wanted to contrast the very orderly facade with the less orderly background and the clear blue sky.
I think the contrast would have become way better if I didn't include the dark side of the building. Now the shadow cuts everything off and is just not pleasant to see.
Ah, I can now see that interpretation, and now understand why you so dislike the shadowed bit.
I passed by again today and got "the good angle". Turned out that had its downsides as well. I don't like that edge ruining the contrast between the building wall and the sky. Once again, perspective is messing with me.
At least it is a little better than the first attempts.
Glad you got a chance to retry - though sometimes the perfect shot just isn't there.
Yeah, it's better, but not perfect