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Poetry

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A community to celebrate published and OC works of poetry.


Welcome to !poetry


Guidelines & Community Rules

In addition to the general rules of lemmy.world:

Published Poetry

1a: Poetry posts should include the title and the author, when the author is known.

O.C. Poetry

2a: Sharing original poetry is encouraged, but it must be preceded by the tag "[OC]."

2b: If an [OC] post is requesting feedback, it should also follow with the "[FB]" tag. It would look like the following example:
[OC] [FB] Nothing Gold Can Stay

Feedback

All feedback should be given in good faith.

3a: All [FB] requests should be met with comments constructive in nature. It is okay to dislike parts of a poem, but make sure to explain why you feel that way.

3b: Feedback does not need to be extraordinary in nature. Simply expressing how a work makes you feel is often enough.

3c: Use the honor system. When you receive good feedback, return it in kind to another author. Everyone appreciates knowing their work is being read and appreciated.

As this community develops, these guidelines may be adjusted.


Formatting Help
Work in progress

To create a line break, use two spaces at the end of a line.

To create empty space, type  . Use four of these at the beginning of a line to create a standard indent.

UPDATE:
Some methods of access do not format markdown correctly. I am currently testing various apps and web interfaces to see what does and does not retain formatting.

In the interim, it is encouraged to post text poetry as you normally would, but to include a link at the beginning or end of the post with access to a website or image that retains the formatting as intended.


Other Poetry Communities
Poetry lovers unite! In the style of the fediverse, multiple poetry communities have arisen, and will continue to rise. I will try to keep a list here of communities across instances that are worth checking out!


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[–] [email protected] 13 points 6 months ago* (last edited 6 months ago) (3 children)

Text version

When people ask me why
it took two years of writing poems
to write this poem
to write the rape poem,
I will tell them all about you.

How you watch this stage
the same way you watch CSI,
you already know what’s coming next,
it’s just another mangled body,
I am just another hit and run,
so you take this time to get another drink,

I’ll tell them
how every story sounds the same
when you stop listening,

I’ll tell them
how nice it must be
to be able to walk away, and
I’ll tell them
how there’s a voice in the back of my head
that sounds an awful lot like yours saying,

This is just another rape poem.

Just another little-girl-lost poem.
Just another do-not-touch-me-until-I-ask you-to-touch-me poem.

Just another seven-years-old,
sleeping with a Tinkerbell wand on my nightstand
and a kitchen knife underneath my pillow
because I swore the next time he came into my bedroom
uninvited
he would come out bleeding poem;
and I get it.

I know that you are tired of hearing rape poems.
I am tired of hearing rape poems,
the same way soldiers are tired of hearing their own guns go off, believe me,
we all wish the war was over, but friend,
you are staring out at a world on fire complaining about how ugly you think the ashes are,

The poems are not the problem.

We have built cathedrals
out of spite and splintered bone,
of course they aren’t pretty,
nothing holy ever is—
Think of Gandhi’s blistered feet,
think of that crown made of thorns
and the sweat on your mother’s sacred chest
as she pushed to get you here,
the work is never pretty,
but it’s the only way the house gets built;

So I’m sorry that you don’t want to look at my wreckage,
but
I have carpentry in my mouth.
I have a hammer in my hands,
you cannot stop me from building,
and as long as you’re there,
in the back of the room,
I am going to be here,
voice made from smolder,
because this is my story
and you cannot take this
from me.

[–] [email protected] 10 points 6 months ago

Another absolutely brilliant poem I wish we didn't need. Tore my heart out.

[–] BonesOfTheMoon 4 points 6 months ago

Thanks. I couldn't get it to work.

[–] [email protected] 3 points 6 months ago (1 children)

You need to put double spaces at the end of the line to break it correctly.

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[–] [email protected] 6 points 6 months ago

Thanks, that was not fun on mobile but I think I got it.

[–] [email protected] 3 points 6 months ago (2 children)

I want to read this at my spoken word meeting next week, but I worry about being seen as appropriating her story or, frankly, telling a woman's story as a man. Can the community give me opinions on this?

[–] Bunnylux 13 points 6 months ago

Seriously? Don't

[–] [email protected] 7 points 6 months ago (1 children)

If you want to share it with the group, print it and hand it out. Do something else for yourself, something to which your mouth and heart can bring authenticity. This poem requires a woman's voice. It's not like there's a shortage of poems written in/for a man's voice.

[–] [email protected] 8 points 6 months ago

I disagree. There are details in this poem that code it as a woman, but men have been raped, esp as children. If this commenter feels a personal connection to someone in that place, I think reading this poem would be ok. It specifically suggests we can all see the world on fire if we choose to look.