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Poetry

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A community to celebrate published and OC works of poetry.


Welcome to !poetry


Guidelines & Community Rules

In addition to the general rules of lemmy.world:

Published Poetry

1a: Poetry posts should include the title and the author, when the author is known.

O.C. Poetry

2a: Sharing original poetry is encouraged, but it must be preceded by the tag "[OC]."

2b: If an [OC] post is requesting feedback, it should also follow with the "[FB]" tag. It would look like the following example:
[OC] [FB] Nothing Gold Can Stay

Feedback

All feedback should be given in good faith.

3a: All [FB] requests should be met with comments constructive in nature. It is okay to dislike parts of a poem, but make sure to explain why you feel that way.

3b: Feedback does not need to be extraordinary in nature. Simply expressing how a work makes you feel is often enough.

3c: Use the honor system. When you receive good feedback, return it in kind to another author. Everyone appreciates knowing their work is being read and appreciated.

As this community develops, these guidelines may be adjusted.


Formatting Help
Work in progress

To create a line break, use two spaces at the end of a line.

To create empty space, type  . Use four of these at the beginning of a line to create a standard indent.

UPDATE:
Some methods of access do not format markdown correctly. I am currently testing various apps and web interfaces to see what does and does not retain formatting.

In the interim, it is encouraged to post text poetry as you normally would, but to include a link at the beginning or end of the post with access to a website or image that retains the formatting as intended.


Other Poetry Communities
Poetry lovers unite! In the style of the fediverse, multiple poetry communities have arisen, and will continue to rise. I will try to keep a list here of communities across instances that are worth checking out!


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[–] themeatbridge 13 points 11 months ago (8 children)

It kinda makes it sound like he's got a thing for Japanese women. Like, that was just a weird detail to include.

[–] lledrtx 15 points 11 months ago

I thought that was weird too. But I think he added that because he was thinking about their dark black hair. It would probably have been less weird if he had said "dark haired women" instead or at least "Asian".

[–] [email protected] 10 points 11 months ago

The reader is allowed to insert their own meaning.

Jack sounds like he's mentally broken but still there enough to be rational and understanding, only to be thrown into chaos again when confronted with the memory he had foregone.

[–] jordanlund 8 points 11 months ago

His wife was Japanese.

[–] venoft 7 points 11 months ago

The woman was Japanese and her sisters or friends or something came over and now he doesn't know which Japanese hair is his wife's.

[–] [email protected] 5 points 11 months ago

Seems he purposefully included that. A vice? Seeking to fill a void? Build a replacement? You decide.

[–] CADmonkey 4 points 11 months ago (1 children)

If his wife is Japanese, then it's likely that his mother in law is Japanese too, along with any sisters or cousins that may come around to help.

[–] themeatbridge 3 points 11 months ago

Fair enough. It just seemed weird.

[–] feedum_sneedson 2 points 11 months ago

Hey, who doesn't?

[–] Bondrewd 0 points 11 months ago

"Anyway, I started fucking women and I couldn't get her hair anymore. What a shame..."