Impronoucabl

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[–] Impronoucabl 2 points 1 month ago

Well, yes.

It doesn't have to be a technical feature though.

[–] Impronoucabl 1 points 1 month ago (2 children)

Why would you sign up for more than one to begin with?

If it's got a good new feature, audience, promise of service, or something to distinguish it from shouting into the void.

[–] Impronoucabl -2 points 1 month ago (5 children)

What's a good reason to sign up for yet another indie writing platform? My time is limited, and there are plenty of alternatives.

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submitted 2 months ago* (last edited 2 months ago) by Impronoucabl to c/writingtips
 

I'm not dead.

Random Prompt: red. RED. REEEEEEEED

Here is your task:

#Write a description without describing how something looks.

Some tips:

  • Lean into stereotypes, assumed knowledge, and relatable interactions.

  • Other senses (Sound, smell, touch, etc) are your friends.

You don’t have to post your piece, but if you do, I’m happy to provide some basic feedback. I encourage others to do the same, so we can all learn from each other.

Bonus: If there’s a particular thing you want to work on, let me know in the comments, & I’ll see if I can tailor future tasks to accommodate our needs.

[–] Impronoucabl 0 points 2 months ago (1 children)

Ok, took a while, but I finally got a chance to read this fully.

My main critique is that this piece feels like a series events rather than a whole - the unsatisfying let down could've hit harder if there was more build up - e.g a notification when you wake up that you need to buy something, etc.

My other critique is pacing, which is still decent, but slightly...off. I'm not sure if that was what you're going for, but with a quick re-write, I reckon you could really push the piece up a tier.

Overall, you've just described most of my mornings ;P

[–] Impronoucabl -3 points 8 months ago (9 children)

PCs aren't phones -They have different expectations and histories.

Would you ever consider buying individual parts, and building your own gaming phone?

The end result is still the same: Less consumer power,.

[–] Impronoucabl 0 points 10 months ago (1 children)

Allow self tending?

[–] Impronoucabl 2 points 10 months ago

Short answer: Yes.

Long answer: This is a chicken or egg question. I do quite a bit of planning, but don't always follow the plan. Sometimes I feel like the plot or characters are moving in a specific direction, so I'll pause, brainstorm a few arcs to see where it may lead, then use that to guide future writing.

I don't like forcing things, because that's usually a recipe for bad writing. But if I run out of time, then there's not much choice.

Hope this helps.

[–] Impronoucabl 26 points 11 months ago (1 children)

Just how was 'Vector graphics' only added in this month? Surely its been more than half a century since the term came up?

 

Released on a Creative commons v4 non-commercial license by me.

Notes

  1. Based heavily on Sherman's Circular, with minor modifications.

  2. Use capital letters to to stop vowel attachment

  3. Some punctuation marks are original, but most follow Sherman's

  4. Numbers are new, mostly because Sherman's style is very impractical for typing maths out. To get a value, just add (number of lines) with (3 x number of dots).

[–] Impronoucabl 1 points 1 year ago

Hmmm.... I'll include more prompts next time then! :D

[–] Impronoucabl 1 points 1 year ago (2 children)

+1 for using random prompt!

I can feel the frustration, anger and general kidsarefuckingstupid vibe from beyond the screen. However, to make it even more unsatisfying, you could show a more conscious decision for the kid to be dumb; Let her reach towards towards the frying pan....but to grab some jam to put on top (who even puts jam on grilled cheese?). But overall, you've definitely captured the grinding-teeth moments of raising a child (I hope I never see this IRL).

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Unfurled Phone (Sherman's) (media.discordapp.net)
submitted 1 year ago* (last edited 1 year ago) by Impronoucabl to c/gallifreyan
 

After several days, I must say, the 'L's and 'C' look very similar.

 

Taking a bit of a breather, here's the next exercise!

Random Prompt: Frying pan

Here is your task:

#Write a piece as to be unsatisfying as possible.

Some tips:

  • The goal of this is to practice build tension, even if there's no way to satisfying release it.

  • Focus more on the how/now than the payoff later.

You don’t have to post your piece, but if you do, I’m happy to provide some basic feedback. I encourage others to do the same, so we can all learn from each other.

Bonus: If there’s a particular thing you want to work on, let me know in the comments, & I’ll see if I can tailor future tasks to accommodate our needs.

[–] Impronoucabl 1 points 1 year ago (1 children)

I know very little about electronics. If Impedance is analogous to resistance from AC to DC, how does that equate in terms of the common water-electricity analogy?

[–] Impronoucabl 1 points 1 year ago

Yes. So if you were to attach a line from "M" to "N", it would count as 1 line for both of them.

 

Continueing on in the spirit of self improvement, here's the next self help exercise!

Random Prompt: Surfing dinosaur

Here is your task:

#Write a three (or more) person conversation without any dialogue tags.

Some tips:

  • If giving each speaker a distinct/unique voice is too hard, try giving them unique tone, or positions instead.
  • Alternatively, start with dialogue tags, then remove them in the edit.

You don't have to post your piece, but if you do, I'm happy to provide some basic feedback. I encourage others to do the same, so we can all learn from each other.

Bonus: If there's a particular thing you want to work on, let me know in the comments, & I'll see if I can tailor future tasks to accommodate our needs.

You have two weeks until the next task. (If you're not done by then, don't worry, I'll keep checking old threads.)

 

A great resource from one of the most successful authors, I would highly recommend anyone writing fiction to watch. It's a long listen, and some parts are focused on sci/fantasy, but it's one of the most useful writing tips on the internet regardless. There's even some publishing tips too.

 

In the spirit of self improvement, let's kick off a new community with a writing exercise!

Random Prompt: Backyard Scientist

Here is your task:

#Write a description (or scene) without any adjectives, or adverbs.

Some tips:

  • Use stronger verbs
  • Use specific names

You don't have to post your piece, but if you do, I'm happy to provide some basic feedback. I encourage others to do the same, so we can all learn from each other.

Bonus: If there's a particular thing you want to work on, let me know in the comments, & I'll see if I can tailor future tasks to accommodate our needs.

You have two weeks until the next task. (If you're not done by then, don't worry, I'll keep checking old threads.)

 

So a while back, on a bus ride to/from home, I wrote down a terrible piece of writing (linked)

Let's dive into why it was so bad.

  1. It wastes the reader's time.

Multiple times in the piece, the same information is conveyed with no additional nuance, context, or subtext.

Repetition to emphasise a point is one thing, but doing it for no benefit is another.

  1. It assumes the reader is dumb.

There's one especially guilty quote from the piece.

Bob had seen faces before.


Because humans are such good pattern-finding machines (as compared with actual computing machines), many explicit descriptions can be inferred from astoundingly little text.

Tom Scott has a great video on "the hidden rules of conversation", and one of the ponts he makes is the 'Maxim of Quantity' - Give as much information as required, and nothing more.

"Alice" & "Bob" are both common english names, and as such, we expect them to be normal english speaking humans, conversing on Earth, without any prompting. Any text that affirms that convention is unneccessary.

I would call this technique of bad writing 'exposing the subtext', but don't think it is universally bad. It could be useful in more complicated, longer works, if the reader is not expected to keep track of multiple (possibly changing & conflicting) POVs.

  1. It tells us one thing, but shows the opposite.

She thought about it for an moment, and then shouted at Bob. Angrily. Very angrily. She said “Because my feelings are telling me to say this.”

Adverbs in general are bad because they tell instead of show, and 'very' is possibly the least desciptive adverb in the English language.

'Angrily' is the telling word here, but the pause before the actual shouting is showing us that Alice is not - anger is not an emotion that causes you to think further before acting.

Furthermore, her dialogue is not written in an angry tone. Good dialogue should convey the tone by itself, but in this case the anger only comes from "shouted" - another telling word. The tone itself is neutral - and therefore calm.


Feel free to discuss &/or tear it to pieces.

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What is tension? (medium.com)
submitted 1 year ago by Impronoucabl to c/writingtips
 

An old article I wrote

 

As far as I know, the beehaw's instance has the most active writing community, but lemmy.world is currently defederated with it.

As I understand, that means anything I post will only be a 'shadow' on the actual instance - only visible from behind the block.

Does anyone else still think its worth posting here, where if we ever refederate, our posts will be 'lost' into the future? Or does anyone else think it'll add a little more illuminati spice?

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Discord link! (discord.gg)
submitted 1 year ago by Impronoucabl to c/gallifreyan
 

I'll update the sidebar later.

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submitted 1 year ago* (last edited 1 year ago) by Impronoucabl to c/writing
 

Title

Edit: I made !writingtips[email protected] to get things going.

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