The thing I’m most drawn to in this photo are the two tiles in the front that are highlighted - really like how they are catching the light at a different angle then the rest of the floor.
With that being the first focal point, cropping could help as mentioned by some others. I actually wish though that the camera closer to the ground for a more dramatic angle and a different perspective.
I didn’t notice the person on the left until I had my lights off, so yeah maybe a tad too dark.
…and what do you think the internet will look like 11 years from now?
Stunning image. Thank you for sharing. It’s the kind of quality I always hope to see, but rarely do.
Yeah - I’m with you on adding in grain. I’ve never felt comfortable with doing it on digital images.
Film is very expensive. Even back in the day it was expensive - but that cost was a great way to slow down the work and force you to think through the whole image. I miss the entire process, but love the immediacy of digital. Maybe try large format class? Like this: https://theimageflow.com/photography-classes/large-format-photography/
Before I got to the “tri-x” comment in you explanation - the only thing I felt was lacking was some beautiful grain of a good ‘ol film photo. (Something to rough it up). The darkness of the photo reminds me of shooting with Poloroid Polapan (a film I loved so much in art school). It had the richest blacks and was moody like nothing else.
I also agree that you shouldn’t pump up the contrast any more. I like the cropping you did. The eye runs down the platform to the sign and back up the rail. I also don’t think having more people in the photo would have improved it. I think it would have made it too noisy. It feels implied that the man sleeping on the bench was forgotten because no one is there.
These are great! And the back story of when you took them and the longing is really reflected in the mood they emit.
I have very little to critique in the way of technique, cropping, etc. which is fantastic, because instead of thinking about the photo itself, I’m more concerned with the story and the subject matter.
The ramen photo is my favorite. I spent some very happy rainy nights in Japan eating ramen. For me the photo provides the intimacy and comfort of the ramen shops.
I feel like the third Oktoberfest photo doesn’t quiet hit the mark for the reason the other two are strong: Oktoberfest is anything but an intimate experience. It’s loud, busy, expansive and invasive. It crowds out the kind of intimacy being portrayed in this photo. Except for the fall leaves, it reminds me more of my trips to the Hintersee and eating germknödel with my German ex.
Thanks! Yeah - I can see there being a need for more of a place for the eye to rest.
Yeah - I can see that. Feels more personal here. So far it’s been a good experience.
Touché. Yup, improving on my craft doesn’t go to well with being lazy. You need some opportunities to approach it from a lazy view point, and I clearly need to up my game.
Can’t wait to see your red poppies! I’ve never managed to get a good photo of them. It’ll be great to have some inspiration.
No - I guess I didn’t think about merging them or doing any photoshop. I’m a pretty lazy photographer. I’m intrigued though. What would you do? I’d love some inspiration.
Thank you for all your thoughts! I’m really appreciating hearing how you are perceiving this photo and where your eye is drawn to.
I hear what you are saying about the background. I have some on a black and white background (white computer paper and my leather couch). I’m kinda lazy about taking photos - I only use what I’ve got on hand.
I think wood - where the tone /richness of color was more similar to the flower would have changed the experience and the starkness of the photo in an interesting way. I’ll poke at that next time I’ve got some interesting flowers dying at home. Thanks!
I’m a product designer by trade, so I’m pretty used to critique. I spend so much time at work with people critiquing my output, I liked taking photos just for my pleasure. I’m not sure I’m growing in my photography any more though. So … here I am. I really do hope you feel courage to share. Your insights are fantastic!
This is a pretty photo. The light streaming through the trees, and the mix of flora and architecture is lovely. I wonder how it would feel if you cropped the bottom up so the forced of the wall met the corner of the photo?