This is fantastic work!
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Creative! I agree that the ramen one is the best of the three, though the one with the snow and cream bun (?) is also fairly good. The person in that one with their face cut off adds a mysterious vibe, though I don't know if that's what you were going for.
The third one, with the beer, idk exactly what happened but the human fingers look weird, like you messed with the contrast or HSL and something went a bit funny. It's a nice shot otherwise, though.
Thanks, the finger looks a bit weird indeed, now that you have mentioned it. Should be able to fix that though. They are all basically selfies and I didn't really feel like showing my face hence they are all cut off.
The cream bun is Swedish semla, a cardamom bun filled with almond paste and cream they are delicious!
I agree but I think the cream bun is the best photo! I think the ramen photo is a little too busy and I like the juxtaposition of the candle, cream bun, and the hand. And how that leads you up to the face that we can't quite see. Kind of a mysterious vibe as you said, but I feel that having the face out of frame makes it easy for your mind to kind of put anyone there and I think that makes it a little more relatable for me at least.
These are great! And the back story of when you took them and the longing is really reflected in the mood they emit.
I have very little to critique in the way of technique, cropping, etc. which is fantastic, because instead of thinking about the photo itself, I’m more concerned with the story and the subject matter.
The ramen photo is my favorite. I spent some very happy rainy nights in Japan eating ramen. For me the photo provides the intimacy and comfort of the ramen shops.
I feel like the third Oktoberfest photo doesn’t quiet hit the mark for the reason the other two are strong: Oktoberfest is anything but an intimate experience. It’s loud, busy, expansive and invasive. It crowds out the kind of intimacy being portrayed in this photo. Except for the fall leaves, it reminds me more of my trips to the Hintersee and eating germknödel with my German ex.
Thanks! That feeling was exactly what I was going for with the ramen photo. I feel the 3rd one is the weakest as well. I was going for a quiet dutch pub kind of vibe enjoying bitterballen and a beer. I'm not entirely sure if I will redo that one with a different subject.