Strong start. Theres conflict, an intriguing setting.
I wonder if we could get a stronger feeling of who the MC is, a little bit of background. Right now she's just a viewpoint. What does she want, why is being fired such a big deal? Is she just worried about money and what Aeko will think, or is there some other reason?
Thanks for sharing this!
Strong start. Theres conflict, an intriguing setting. I wonder if we could get a stronger feeling of who the MC is, a little bit of background. Right now she's just a viewpoint. What does she want, why is being fired such a big deal? Is she just worried about money and what Aeko will think, or is there some other reason? Thanks for sharing this!